Edited by Patricia Stammers, Monday, 3 Mar 2014, 10:14
I was sitting with a book in the office, while waiting for the boss's instructions, when someone said,
"What're you reading?" I held the book up so the front cover was visible and he said,
"I laid Homer."
That's one of the things that made me think of writing poetry.
The Cinquain is a form with which I'm experimenting.
Mere Street
The Mere
aisles in between
the parting banks of green,
and duck rush cobalt smiles across
to you.
Unfortunately 'cobalt smiles' reminds me of someone with heart trouble. The phrase is meant to recall sky reflecting waves pushed towards you by the duck's breast but was not readily understood by my listener.
Considering the comma is interesting. On occasions you must use a comma and on others you can if you like. The rule is never separate the subject and verb unless using an adverb.
I'm currently editing BBC and WAYB competition stories for a couple of hours a day, and I usually find phrases to rewrite, and grammar to correct. The closing date for the WAYB is 15th February.
Homer, The Romance
I was sitting with a book in the office, while waiting for the boss's instructions, when someone said,
"What're you reading?" I held the book up so the front cover was visible and he said,
"I laid Homer."
That's one of the things that made me think of writing poetry.
The Cinquain is a form with which I'm experimenting.
Mere Street
The Mere
aisles in between
the parting banks of green,
and duck rush cobalt smiles across
to you.
Unfortunately 'cobalt smiles' reminds me of someone with heart trouble. The phrase is meant to recall sky reflecting waves pushed towards you by the duck's breast but was not readily understood by my listener.
Considering the comma is interesting. On occasions you must use a comma and on others you can if you like. The rule is never separate the subject and verb unless using an adverb.
I'm currently editing BBC and WAYB competition stories for a couple of hours a day, and I usually find phrases to rewrite, and grammar to correct. The closing date for the WAYB is 15th February.